ぎこちない英文ですみませんが・・。疑問点があります。
My hobbies are diverse.
In one of them,I am often hanging out a mall with friends just for fun,but there I am ashamed of not buying an item but thinking it's so great and precious a goods that I should only stare at these goods.
In another of them,I like to watch cross-border's dramas,called "24" and "Prison Break",and so on.
In a third of them,I like to take a trip frequently.
Unfortunately,I don't have much money now,in another words,I can't afford to pay for various tour's plans in spite of I want to do.
Instead,I think I'll go abroad to study English and culture,saving a lot of money.
Finally,I like playing a lot of sports better than any other thing.
という趣味に関する英作を提出しました。
すると、In one of them,In another of them,In a third of them,but there I am ashamed of not buying an item but thinking it's so great and precious a goods that I should only stare at these goods.
を削除されてしまいました。やっぱり変なんですよね？？；；
初学者なんで、これくらいの文しか書けません。。
それに、なんでIn (one,another a third of)は削除されてしまったのですか？？topicの書き方が変ですか？？
全然分かりません。教えてください＞＜
