一橋英作文の添削よろしくおねがいします。
一橋 2009
Write 120 to 150 words of English about the topic below.
A sense of humour is one of the most important things in life.
I'm in favor of the idea that a sense of humour is one of the most important things
in life.
Surely, some people say that even if a person who has it, no difficult problems will be
solved, so there is no point having it.
In my opinion, however, it is very important for all people and in a lot of situations
,especially in difficult situations,to have it. People tend to be nervous when they face
difficult situations, and no good ideas will be come up with unless they are nervous.
However, what if there is a person who has a sense of humour? He would be likely to
make nervous people relax by using it. By doing so, people could make the best of their power.
That is why I agree with the idea.
自分の意見と反対の意見をつくるときに「自分の意見→反対の意見」としたため、若干の理由説明の弱さを自分で感じるのですがどうでしょうか。
また、a sense of humour を途中まで代名詞 it を用いてたのですが、少し a sense of humour の意の it を使わなくなったので 再びa sense of humour と書きました。
この場合は少し距離（？）があいていても it と表現しても問題ないのでしょうか？
回答よろしくお願いします。
