翻訳お願いします

質問

アメリカに住んでいます。
小学１年生の息子の担任が５月末で定年退職されるメールが届きました。
とても素晴らしい先生だったので、私も息子も正直ショックを受けています。
とりあえず、まだ英語が上手に話せない息子が残念がっていることを伝えたいのですが、
こんな英語で大丈夫でしょうか？

○○○ was shocked to hear about your retirement.
And he told me that he doesn’t know the English expression.
Actually, he has a lot more he wants to talk you about
He loves you very much, and he always enjoyed attending your class.
We will miss you.
You have been the best teacher for everyone.
We can’t thank you enough for teaching my son
Wish you a happy life as ever.

回答No.1

marbleshit · ベストアンサー

○○○ was shocked to hear about your retirement.
And he told me that he didn’t know how to express in English.
Actually, he wants to tell you that he loves you very much and always enjoyed attending your class.
We will miss you.
I believe that you have been the best teacher to everyone.
So I can’t help but thank you very much for teaching my son.
I wish you a happy bright life.

お礼

Thank you for answering may question.
It was a great help.

回答No.2

Him-hymn

○○○ was shocked to hear about your retirement.
○○○ told me that he cannot express what he wants to say in English. He does have a lot of things to say about you. Most important of all, he wants to say he loves you. ○○○ has always enjoyed attending your class.
○○○ and I will really miss you.
I'm sure you have been the best teacher to everyone.
We can’t thank you enough for teaching my son.
We wish you a happy life as ever.

以上でいかがでしょうか。なるべく元の英文を生かし、かつ、その内容をしっかり出そうと考えて一部表現を変えました。また、○○○と名前を少し多く入れました（その方がこういう場合、リアルな感じがでますね）。

お礼

なるほど！名前を多く入れる方が、いいですね！
参考になりました。
有難うございます。