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For middle‐class Americans, the 1950s were a time of prosperity.
Americans had more discretionary income, and they spent it on cars, homes, television sets, and an array of other household appliances.
Throughout the country, while many Americans enjoyed the fruits of an “affluent society,” poverty was more widespread than most believed, and the struggle for civil rights by minorities, particularly African‐Americans, became a national concern.
⇨For middle‐class Americans, the 1950s were a time of prosperity.
Americans had more discretionary income, and they spent it on cars, homes, television sets, and other household appliances.
A lot of people in America feel an "affluent society", while poverty was more widespread, and the struggle for civil rights by minorities, particularly African‐Americans, became a national concern.
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