英文の添削をお願いします

質問

日本語の本文が　以下の様な文です

お元気でいらっしゃいますか
何時も姉を見守って下さり
私達は　あなたに感謝しています
右膝手術は順調に回復しつつ有りますが
今年の２月に背中と腰を強打してしまい
ました、骨折はしていないとの診断でしたが
、痛みがひどく　ベッドの昇り降りが、出来る様に成るまで、３ヶ月余りも掛かり、この様な事情で手紙を差し上げる出来ませんでした
お許し下さい
姉への手紙を本人に渡して下さい
手紙でしか元気着けれませんが、姉さんのことを遠くから見守っている兄弟の居る事を忘れないで下さい
貴方の優しい心遣いをどうぞ姉に届けて下さい
宜しくお願いいたします

以下の様に訳してみましたが

How are you

Thanks for helping my old sister

I appreciate everything you’re doing

The right knee operation improved but February of this year

In the room I feel and bruised hit the waist bad did not break a bone

Lying down and getting up is hard and pain is intense

Until get a pain needed it for Three month

By such circumstances Excuse me for not answering for long time

I’d like to ask you to give her a letter

I can support only in a letter Remember it Brother worry to her

Distantly remote place and with Love

I hate to bother you but could you Once again thanks for doing this for me

Sincerely God Ble

添削をお願い出来ないでしょうか
翻訳ソフトと　英文手紙の書き方を参照して　作成しましたので
語彙や文法等々に誤りが有るかと思いますので
宜しく　お願いいたします

此処までお読み下さり有難う御座います

回答No.1

Him-hymn · ベストアンサー

ピリオドを入れました。
★How are you.
→いいです。

★Thanks for helping my old sister.
→見守るというのですが、まあ、helpingでもいいでしょう。私なら
Thank you for watching over my sister.
とします。

★I appreciate everything you’re doing.
→I appreciate everything you've been doing.

★The right knee operation improved.
In the room I feel and bruised hit the waist bad did not break a bone. Lying down and getting up is hard and pain is intense.Until get a pain needed it for Three month.
→After the operation on my right knee, it's getting better as expected, but in February this year, I hit my back and hips hard. No bones were broken but I got a lot of pain and it took me over three months to be able to get into and out of bed.
(I got a lot of painをthe pain was intenseでも。)

★By such circumstances Excuse me for not answering for long time.
→This is why I could not write to you for three months. Please forgive me.

★I’d like to ask you to give her a letter.
→I’d like to ask you to give my sister the letter that is addressed to her.

★I can support only in a letter Remember it Brother worry to her.
→This is the only way to cheer her up, but please remember that there is her brother who is watching over her.

★Distantly remote place and with Love.
→Do please be kind to my sister.

★Sincerely God Ble.
→Sincerely yours,
署名

以上、かなり書き換えましたがよろしいでしょうか。

お礼

早速の回答ありがとうございます
おかげ様で アメリカの 叔母とその支援者さんに手紙を送ることが
出来 大変に助かりました
何分 学生時代になんとか 赤点を逃れた程度のレベルでしたので
本当にありがとうございます