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質問

Please spread to many people and save SGI members.

If SGI members can continue the SGI faith and have a happy future, we will not advise everyone to escape from SGI.
The reason we advise is because we know that continuing SGI faith will make everyone unhappy.

[ The reason ]
1. Because it is contrary to the teaching of Nichiren-Daishonin.
2. Because it is contrary to the teaching of Ikeda-Sensei.
3. Because Gohonzon is fake.

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First Chairman Makiguchi and Second Chairman Toda, why all of their descendants gone away SGI.
The reason is that the doctrine about Gohonzon has become the opposite.
First Chairman Makiguchi, and Second Chairman Toda, and Third Chairman Ikeda, the three Chairmans believed in this way.

Gohonzon must be appropriate, to the teachings of Nichiren-Daishonin.
If the most important Gohonzon is fake, it is not Nichiren-Daishonin's Buddhism.
It is a big mistake to worship fake Gohonzon made by someone.
Heresy Buddhism is worshiping fake Gohonzon.
Worshiping fake Gohonzon makes us unhappy.

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However, Sixth Chairman Harada changed the SGI doctrines.
SGI took real Gohonzon photo.
SGI has falsified the photo with a computer.
SGI created the Gohonzon by printing the photo.

This is a fake Gohonzon that turned against the teachings of Nichiren-Daishonin.

8 November 2015, SGI Chairman Harada said.
"SGI does not need Gohonzon of Nichiren-Daishonin."
”SGI worships Gohonzon created by SGI.”

Perfectly SGI abandoned Nichiren-Daishonin's faith.
SGI has changed to a new religion that has nothing to do with Nichiren-Daishonin's faith.
However, SGI frequently uses Nichiren-Daishonin's name and doctrines.
For that reason, many people think that SGI has Nichiren-Daishonin's faith.
An ignorant believer being deceived by SGI in this way.

The reason why Chairman Harada was able to make such an reckless action.
That's because Ikeda-Sensei got sick.　
It is because Ikeda-Sensei can not take command.
Ikeda-Sensei has been unconscious for some time.
In the meantime, Chairman Harada changed the teaching of Ikeda-Sensei.

However, Ikeda-Sensei recovered with a strong vitality.
An ordinary person would have died as it was.
The only after-effect of Ikeda-Sensei is difficulty walking.
There are many people who have difficulty walking.
That's not a disgrace thing at all.

However, the Headquarters Executive Department considered that the sight of Ikeda-Sensei's wheelchair was embarrassment and hid the physical condition of Ikeda-Sensei.
And, Headquarter Executive Department announces to SGI members that Ikeda-Sensei changed the SGI doctrines.
Executives of Ikeda-Sensei's disciple protested against Headquarters Executive Department.
“Ikeda-Sensei does not do such a teaching.”
“Don't fool SGI members.”

The true message of Ikeda-Sensei has been completely changed by the Headquarters Executive Department.
All of Ikeda-Sensei's disciples who protested against it were expelled from SGI.
The current Soka-Gakkai is totally different from the teachings of Ikeda-Sensei.
Still, the people who remain in Soka-Gakkai are not the disciples of Ikeda-Sensei.

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回答No.2

cbm51901 · ベストアンサー

Please spread to as many people as possible, and save SGI members.

If we thought SGI members can expect a happy future by continuing to have faith in SGI, we would not advise them to leave SGI.
Sadly this is not the case:

[Reasons for leaving SGI]
1. SGI teaching is contrary to the teaching of Nichiren-Daishonin.
2. SGI teaching is contrary to that of Ikeda-Sensei.
3. Because Gohonzon is a fake.

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All the disciples of the First Chairman Makiguchi and the Second Chairman Toda, have left SGI. Why?
The reason is that the doctrine of Gohonzon has become the opposite of what it initially set out to be.
The First Chairman Makiguchi, and the Second Chairman Toda, and the Third Chairman Ikeda; they all believed as follows:

Gohonzon must be true to the teachings of Nichiren-Daishonin.
If the most important Gohonzon is fake, it is not Nichiren-Daishonin's Buddhism.
It is a big mistake to worship a fake Gohonzon made up by someone.
Worshipping a fake Gohonzon is a heresy Buddhism.
Worshipping a fake Gohonzon does not bring one happiness.

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However, the Sixth Chairman Harada changed the SGI doctrines.
SGI took a photo of the real Gohonzon.
SGI has then falsified the photo with a computer.
SGI has created a fake Gohonzon by printing the photo.

This is a fake Gohonzon that turns against the teachings of Nichiren-Daishonin.

On November 8, 2015, the SGI Chairman Harada said,
"SGI does not need Gohonzon of Nichiren-Daishonin."
”SGI memebers should worship Gohonzon created by SGI.”

At this point, SGI abandoned Nichiren-Daishonin's teaching completely.
SGI has become a totally new religion that has nothing to do with the faith of Nichiren-Daishonin.
In spite of this, SGI frequently uses Nichiren-Daishonin's name and doctrines.
For this reason, many people assume that SGI follows Nichiren-Daishonin's teachings. In this way, SGI has been deceiving naive and uninformed believers alike.

The reason why Chairman Harada was able to make such a reckless action, was
that Ikeda-Sensei fell ill.　
As a result of his illness, Ikeda-Sensei could not take command.
Ikeda-Sensei had in fact been unconscious for some period.
During that time, Chairman Harada changed the teachings of Ikeda-Sensei.

However, Ikeda-Sensei has since recovered with strength.
An ordinary person would probably not have recoverd, but not Ikeda-Sensei.
The only after-effect Ikeda-Sensei has suffered, is difficulty in walking.
This is not a disgrace at all. There are many people who have difficulty walking.

However, the Headquarters Executive Department considered the sight of Ikeda-Sensei in a wheelchair an embarrassment, and hid the physical condition of Ikeda-Sensei.
Moreover, Headquarter Executive Department announced to SGI members that Ikeda-Sensei changed the SGI doctrines.
To counter such an annoucement, executives of Ikeda-Sensei's disciples protested against Headquarters Executive Department:
“That is contrary to Ikeda-Sensei's teaching.”
“Don't fool SGI members.”

The true message of Ikeda-Sensei has been completely changed by the Headquarters Executive Department.
All of Ikeda-Sensei's disciples who protested against it were expelled from SGI.
Today's Soka-Gakkai is based on teachings totally different from those of Ikeda-Sensei. The people who remain in Soka-Gakkai are far from the disciples of Ikeda-Sensei.

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お礼

I registered Daisuke as a fan of OKWAVE.
Reading Daisuke's translation, I thought that my translation was a sentence that made the other person uncomfortable.
Daisuke thought about the feelings of the person who read the sentence and changed it into a good sentence.
Thank you for answering in real English used by people in the English country, not English like the documents I learned in Japan.

補足

I appreciate your splendid answer.

「All the disciples of the First Chairman Makiguchi and the Second Chairman Toda, have left SGI.」

I want to mean the word "disciples" to mean "children and grandchildren", is it the correct by changing it to "descendants"?

回答No.4

cbm51901

>「（彼らの）直系の子孫たち」を指す場合、この２つのどちらを用いても、英語圏の人に違和感はないですか？

⇒ どちらを用いても良いと思います。敢えて比較するとすれば、
「direct descendants」＝ こちらの方が一般的で分かり易い表現だと思います。
「lineal descendants」＝ どちらかというと法律用語的な要素を持っていると感じます（硬いイメージ）。

回答No.3

cbm51901

> I want to mean the word "disciples" to mean "children and grandchildren", is it the correct by changing it to "descendants"?

⇒ Yes, please change the word to "descendants".
Decsendants can also mean "younger generation of students", so I think it is very appropriate.

For your reference: https://eow.alc.co.jp/search?q=descendant

補足

なるほどですね。
大変勉強になります。

「direct-descendants」＝「直系・直接的の子孫たち」
「lineal-descendants」＝「直系の子孫たち」

「（彼らの）直系の子孫たち」を指す場合、この２つのどちらを用いても、英語圏の人に違和感はないですか？

回答No.1

double_triode

飛ばし飛ばし読みましたが，おおむね理解できました。教義とか内部抗争はよくわかりませんでしたが，英語の問題じゃないでしょう。