英作文の添削をお願いします。
初音ミクという新しい音楽についてあなたは良いと思うか悪いと思うかに関してです
賛成反対両方について書きました。
文法誤りや10/10で評価願います
反対
I think a new music of Hatsune Miku is no good , because it is not a real voice but a machanical voice .
Of coruse, everyone easily can make a lot of music without a real vocalist now.
But a machanical voice can't inform a lot of people to like listening to music of feelings , because it is none too lively, whlle a real voice can inform them of feelings and attraction .
Therefore, I can't understand music of Hatsune Miku .
賛成
I think a new music of Hatsune Miku is a very wonderful invention, because it caused a variety of merits.
For example, there is a success of live peformance.
The live of Hatsune Miku in Japan gathered a lot of people ,regardless of thier age , sex or nationality.
In addition, japanese people can exchange thoughts and ideas with people all over the world by the shared hobby that you listen to music of Hatsune Miku.
Therefore, I can understand the new music of Hatsune Miku.