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質問

買いたいものが見つけることができなかったんだぁ。東京みたいに人が多くて疲れたよ＾＾イアンには、この寒さは厳しいかもね！って
I could not find what I want to buy. I was tired......like tokyo. It might be cold for Ian.

回答No.2

enna2005

I could not find what I wanted to buy. There were so many people out there like Tokyo and it made me tired.
This cold weather might be tough for Ian.

回答No.1

SPS700

I could not find what I wanted to buy. I was tired......it was so crowded like tokyo. It might be cold for Ian.

でしょうかね。want を変えて、時を could に合わせて wanted とし、「人が多くて」を足しました。