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Cathy: Hey. There she is. Morning, Alice.
Alice: Oh. Morning, Cathy.
C: How did it go yesterday? Tell me.
A: Well... It was not something I expected, but ended up great, I guess.〈g〉
C: What happened, exactly? Come on!
A: Okay. We were meeting together at a movie theater...
C: Oh? He didn't pick you up? He doesn't drive?
A: Sure he does. It's just that his parents don't let him drive alone for now.
C: Okay. Then?
A: I got there a bit early, so waited for him... drinking some coffee... and when I saw him coming up, my brain stopped... The next moment, he was standing in front of me and saying "Hi", smiling.
C: Wow!
A: ... Well, I was just swept off my feet by his very cool line of "Hi" and ... I...
C: Alice?
A: I... spilled coffee on my clothes...
C: Oh, no! You okay? Didn't get burned?
A: No, it wasn't that hot any more, but...
C: I know how you feel, Alice... I'd rather die, if I were you...
A: Yeah, I was embarrassed and almost started to cry, actually.
But, Cathy, he said to me this way, as he took his jacket off and handed it to me.
"Don't you worry. You wanna come to my place to get it cleaned, okay? I know my mom's expecting you to come and would be more than happy to take care of this. And besides, I wanna spend some more time with you. Alice, is it okay to call my mom and ask her to pick us up?"
... I think I'm in love, Cathy...
C: He's so sweet! No wonder you never looked better... Well, Alice... I wanna ask you something... He has any brothers?
A: Oh, come on!
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