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テーマ：小学校における外国語教育の是非
In my opinion, children should not study a foreign language in an elementary school.
It is true that learning another language enables us to communicate with people who speak the language, and to see the world in a new way.
However, I believe that people in their early days ought to learn their own language deeply. It is because mother tongue has a very important role in their lives, and peole could establish their identity by studying it enough. Furthermore, children in an elementary school already have many subjects to study, so it is not able to be thought of as a wise selection to made children have more burden.
For these reasons, I emphasize that children should study their own language deeply insted of learnig foreign languages.
