一橋大学 自由英作文
こんにちは。受験生です
私は来年一橋大学を受験しようと思っています。
そこで皆さんには一橋英語の自由英作文を添削してもらいたいと思います。
ただ、パソコン上でいちいち添削してもらうのも忍びないので、
１）論理・説得力
２）特筆するほどの文法・構文ミス
３）使える表現, 幅広く使える定型表現など
４）総合点（やはり一橋を基準としたときに、それは合格点をいただけるのかどうか、などです））
をつけていただきたいと思います。もちろんコメントだけでも結構です。
There are three reasons for suggesting that the establishment of a cashless society should benefit society.
First, it is convenient. In such a society, we would not bother to count bills or take with us a purse full of changes. All we have to do is to pay by a credit card. Therefore we could purchase things smoothly and conveniently.
Second, a cashless society is safe. In other words, there is nothing to steal. Elaborating on it, we do not have to take wit us anything embarrassing to steal.
Finally, the establishment of a cashless society would possibly lead to economic equality. Unlike the currency of each country, one global currency like a world credit card could be made use of all over the world. If a global currency spreads more and more, we could be able to take a step toward the unification of the world.
Consequently, the establishment of a cashless society would benefit humanity.
読みにくい、稚拙な英文で申し訳ないです。
ぜひ一読した上でご指導お願いします。
お礼
どうもありがとうございます！