英文を添削してください
アメリカの1950年の消費文化(consumer culture)についての文です。
The American manufacturing economy switched from producing war-related items to consumer goods such as appliances and automobiles at the end of World War II.
To help create jobs for the tens of thousands of soldiers returning to the workforce from the war and build on the country's newfound economic prosperity, the government, along with businesses and marketing firms, began a campaign to stir up consumer activity.
U.S. politicians argued that widespread ownership of more possessions would create greater social equality, thereby proving the superiority of the market system. Consumerism, therefore, acted as a function of the drive to defeat communism.
⇨The American manufacturing economy switched from producing war-related items to consumer goods such as appliances and automobiles at the end of World War II.
To help create jobs for the soldiers returned from the war and build on the country's newfound economic prosperity, the government began a campaign.
U.S. politicians argued that more possessions would create greater social equality, thereby proving the superiority of the market system.
Consumerism acted as a function of the drive to defeat communism.
⇨以降は私が短くした文です。こちらの文を添削して欲しいです。
あと、もしこの情報はいらない、ここは省いてもいい、もっと短くできる、などあればそちらも教えて欲しいです。
よろしくお願いします。
お礼
冠詞にはそういう役割もあるんですね。 とても勉強になりました。