Should My Country City Host the Olympics?| OKWAVE

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英作文の添削です誤字訂正箇所や採点を100点基準でお願いします。ちなみに仮定法をつかっているのは指定条件下にあるので気にしないで下さい…m(__)m If I became a worker , I woul d live in my home by myself, because to live with only myself is a variety of merits. Of course, with my family I can save a lot of money : in fact It costs a lo t of money to live by myself . However,with by myself I would be free to use the time for myself such as shopping ,reading .,relaxing...and so on. I would also can independent of my family and grow as human . For example, I would try to make some food and manage to get earnings . On the other hand, I would freely can't use the time if I lived with my family, because my parents worry about me when I be in out till being late at night. Therefore, I suggest that I choose to live with only myself. この質問を補足する

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大学受験浪人生です　よろしければ添削お願いいたしますあなたは日本のどこかの大都市がオリンピックを招待すべきだと思いますか、思いませんか。　またそれはなぜですか。　あなたの考えを８０語以上の英語でまとめよ I agree that somewhere city should invite Olympics. This is because I think that Olympics improve economics in many ways. For example, some people will want to watch Olympics directly so people will visit the city where Olympics are held and they will live in the city for a while. While they are living in the city, they will buy a lot of goods at the city and consequently, it will make economics improve. That is why I agree that somewhere city should invite Olympics.

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初音ミクという新しい音楽についてあなたは良いと思うか悪いと思うかに関してです賛成反対両方について書きました。文法誤りや10/10で評価願います反対 I think a new music of Hatsune Miku is no good , because it is not a real voice but a machanical voice . Of coruse, everyone easily can make a lot of music without a real vocalist now. But a machanical voice can't inform a lot of people to like listening to music of feelings , because it is none too lively, whlle a real voice can inform them of feelings and attraction . Therefore, I can't understand music of Hatsune Miku . 賛成 I think a new music of Hatsune Miku is a very wonderful invention, because it caused a variety of merits. For example, there is a success of live peformance. The live of Hatsune Miku in Japan gathered a lot of people ,regardless of thier age , sex or nationality. In addition, japanese people can exchange thoughts and ideas with people all over the world by the shared hobby that you listen to music of Hatsune Miku. Therefore, I can understand the new music of Hatsune Miku.

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出来栄えも10てん中で判断してほしいです。ポスターで募集をかけているボランティアの数を増えないのでどうすれば増やせるか(慶應経済) そしてそれは何故増えないのか増やすにはどうすればいいか何故成功できると考えるかを含めて説明せよという問題です I think why only a few students responded is a variety of reasens. One reasen is that a lot of good imformation ,such as merits of volunteer are lacking. By this demerit, a lot of high school students to want to work as a volunteer may lose motivation. Another reasen is that the time to carry out a volunteer work is fixed. They can't conduct volunteer everyday because they are busy studying as a high school students . Therefore, I think what they can do to increase the number of volunteers is that they should change a cotents of the poster. if they can describe a vriety of merits of volunteer work and explain the students can be free to have a right to conduct volunteer work in poster , they will be able to increase the number of volunteers.

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至急です！英検2級の英作文添削お願いします；；添削だけでもいいのですが、もしわかる方がいらっしゃったら採点もお願いします；； TOPIC Today in Japan, many buildings and public areas have a lot of lights for decoration, such as the lights used during Christmas. Do you think this is a good idea? I don't think this is good idea that buildings and public areas have a lot of lights for decoration. Firstly, if people continue using lights for decoration, the cost likely to get worse and worse. Indeed, electric bill is to get higher and higher now. Thus, using a lot of lights for decoration is waste money. Secondly, using electricity is bad influence for environment. In fact, many people say saving electricity is a good for environment. In conclusion, I think people should abolish using lights of decoration.

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お礼は必ずします。よろしくお願いします Recruitment of friend！(British　or 　American) Nice to meet you. My name is A I am a 35-year-old Japanese man and I live in Osaka. I am 172 cm tall and I weigh 65 kg. My blood type is A. I am a chemist at a chemists,selling medicines. I like playing football and walking my dog. I love Britain and American. I would like to be your friend. Could you correspond with me if you don't mind? If you correspond with me, I would provide you with something you can obtain only in Japan. Through corresponding with you, I would be able to improve my English and increase my knowledge about Britain and USA. Please become my friend by all means. My e-mail address is shown below. I am looking forward to your favorable reply. I would like to see you in near days. see you

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相変わらず海外旅行が花盛りだ。【せっかくたくさんのお金を使っている以上、ただ外国の景色を眺めて帰ってくるだけでは、もったいない。】 You spend a lot of money on a trip abroad, so just going sightseeing and returning home is only waste of money. 解答では ..., it is waste just to see the sight and come back. となっていたんですが、上のように書いても意味通じるでしょうか？

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英作文が苦手なので、上達のため英文を書いてみました。文法上の間違い、文章の構造などについて、アドバイスをください。テーマは「大学の秋入学について」です Recently,many universities are considering whether change the admission season from spring to autumn　or not. This attempt arouse wide public concern, and, of course the public divided into supporｔer and opponent. In my opinion, it is beneficial to universities. Under the existing system, because of the different program between Japanese university and foreign university, each students are hard to study in abroad.So, If the attempt carry out, many Japanese students are easier to go abroad and Universities can receive more international students. Moreover the increasing of international students in Japan can improve Japanese students' sense of competition and cooperation. However, opponent says this attempt can destroy Japanese traditional culture. They think globalization is equal to imitating USA, and Japan should have own position in the world. As far as I concerned,the opponent's opinion is too much exaggerated. Foreign country is not only USA , but also including non-English country. And we can't neglect Japanese culture. If the globalization will be success, Japan's economy turn to good condition gradualｙ. From the above thing, I support the autumn admission.

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英作文の添削をお願いします。問い　 ‘An education changes your mirrors into windows’ .Explain what this quote means. 答案 This quote means that education give us a different viewpoint that helps us to think widely. The mirrors imply a limited world where we can look only ourself. And the windows imply a widely viewpoint which we can look around the world. If we get a good education,we would see things objectively and correctly. But if we couldn’t get enough education,we would be a person who has a narrow vision. So this quote teaches us the importance of education. 拙い英文だと思いますが何卒よろしくお願いします。

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問題 Visitors from abroad tell you they want to see " the true Japan". Where would you take them, and why? 解答 If I were asked the desire, I would take them to Kyoto. I think the city in Kyoto has many Japanese traditions. For example, there are famous temples such as Kiyomizu temple in Kyoto. Moreover, the city has many women called Maiko and a lot of special productions such as Yatuhashi. I think the best way they understand " the true Japan" is that they see and know "the previous Japan". Kiyomizu temple and Maiko can teach them the Japanese history. Besides, in Muromachi age, Muromachi Bakuhu was made up in Kyoto. Thus, there are a lot of Japanese histories in Kyoto and they can see or learn those. So I think if they go to Kyoto, they will understand " the true Japan". It is true that the city also has modern buildings such as Kyoto Tower. However, I`m sure that the city show them " the true Japan". 訳もし私がそのお願いをされたら、私は彼らを京都に連れて行きます。私は京都の町にはたくさんの日本の伝統があると思います。例えば、京都には清水寺のような有名な寺があります。さらに、その町には舞妓と呼ばれる女性が多くいるし、八つ橋のような名産品も多くあります。私は彼らが「本当の日本」を理解する最も良い方法は彼らが「以前の日本」を見て、知ることだと思うのです。清水寺や舞妓は彼らに日本の歴史を教えることができるでしょう。さらに、室町時代には、室町幕府が京都で構成されていました。このように京都には日本の歴史がたくさんあります。なので、私は彼らが京都に行けば、「本当の日本」を理解するだろうと思うのです。確かに京都の町には京都タワーのような現代の建物もあります。しかし、私はその町が彼らのに「本当の日本」を示してくれると確信しているのです。というふうに書いてみました。自分的に微妙なところが「室町幕府」の表現です。書き終えた後に辞書で調べてみると、幕府は「Shougnate」というなぞの単語であらわすというのがわかりました。でも、そんな単語知らないので単純に「Bakuhu」でいいのかな？と思いました。評価と添削をよろしくお願いします。

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コンクリートの建物に囲まれ、機能第一主義の無機質な都会で生活していると、鳥や虫の鳴き声に耳をすませたり、名も知らぬような草木に目をやったりしながら、季節の微妙な移り変わりを実感するようなことがめっきり少なくなってきたように思う。もっと心に余裕を持ち、一回きりのかけがえのない人生をうるおいのあるものにしたいと考えて、田舎に移住することを決断する人が近年増えてきているのも無理からぬことである。 Living in urban where they are a lot of concrete buildings and functions are regarded as first priority thing, the opportunities are really decreasing in which we can feel subtle seasonal changes with hearing sounds of birds and insects and with seeing grasses and trees of which I don’t know the names. It is inevitable that the number of people is increasing in recent years, who decide to move from urban to rural in order to live at their own pace and make their limited life satisfied. よろしくお願いします。　

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英作文の添削をお願いします！ About global warming One of the problem which is caused by grobal warming is sea level rise. This is a serious problem because the influence by sea level rise is predicted that Marshall Islands sinks in 80% of a country. One of the way to stop this is to discourage the use of cars. For example, limiting the use of private cars in big city such as Tokyo and Osaka,where public transportation is readily available, may be the first step. 自分は大学受験生です。私が受ける大学で自由英作文が課されるのですが回りに添削してくれる人がいないので困ってます。どんな些細なことでもいいので意見を下さればありがたいです。

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阪大の問題です観光産業は２０世紀後半に劇的な成長を遂げた。観光客の数が増えるにつれて新しい体験を求める欲求は複雑化した。その結果、旅行者たちはそれぞれの好みにあった観光の形態を求めるようになった。自分の訳 Tourism developed dramatically in the latter part of the twentieth century.As the number of tourists grew,a desire to have a new experience become complicated.As a result,tourists learned to ask for tourist forms which fit for their tastes. 語法（単数複数、定冠詞不定冠詞も含めて）等、間違っているor微妙なところがあれば指摘していただければ幸いです１０点満点で評価もしていただけたら最高ですよろしくお願いします

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英作文をしたのですが自信がありません。文法等の添削、内容についてのアドバイスをお願いします。 In recent years, there has been a lot of argument of having classes on Saturdays in elementary schools in Japan. A five-day school week started as a part of the new education system known as “yutori education” and these days it has been argued that we should do away with this system as soon as possible. But this system shouldn’t be abolished for following 3 reasons. First, it helps children to get communication ability. In Japanese elementary school, they usually don’t have discussions in the classes. They only listen to the teachers speaking at their desk, having little time to have interactive communications. It obviously prevents children from getting communication ability. But if Saturday is a holiday, they will have a lot of time to spend with their friends and families, and have a lot of time to have interactive communications. Actually, in my childhood I used to go a park to play catch with my father on Saturdays and talked a lot with him. There is no doubt that it has great effects on communication ability to talk a lot with friends and families. And it also prompts children to be independent. In school, they do only things that the teachers say to do. But when they graduate, no one tells them what to do. They have to find what to do on their own. If Saturday is a holiday, they will have more chance to know themselves, and to think about what they should do, that is, to be independent. In addition, apart from the educational problems, it will bring us economic effectiveness. If it is holiday on Saturdays, more people will go traveling with their family, and spend a lot of money on their way. Even if you don’t go traveling, we will have more chance to spend money to have pleasure. Actually, after playing catch I used to go to batting center with my father on Saturdays. There is no doubt that we use more money if children are at home than if they are in school.

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(1)クローン羊Dollyを作った英国人研究者のもとに、数家族から死亡した肉親の複製を作ってもらいたいという依頼があったという。 (2)この技術の人間への応用は可能であろうが、 (3)仮にクローン人間が出現したら、親子という概念は変質し、「自分とは何か」という問いに直面することになるだろう。 (1)Some families asked the English researcher, who made Dolly, a clonal sheep , to make the clone of their dead relatives. (2)It is surely possible to apply this technology to human beings. (3)However, if clonal humans came into being, the conception of parent and child would change, and you would be faced with the question what you are. ・「自分とは何か」という問い　についての表現は適当でしょうか。・Dolly,・・・に続く同格表現は適当でしょうか。他にも不適当な箇所がありましたらご指摘ください、お願いします。

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テーマはここ数年のニュースで話題になったものというものです。 I was interested in the news which the age of adult should be lowered to eighteen years old. I agree with this idea. Young people these days are overprotected. They can't know anything about the world. It is true that people in their teens still aren't mentally and physically mature. Manｙ teenageｒ don't have a full time job, live with their parents and depend on their parents, However, this is the reason why the age of adult should be lowered. Someday, they will have to live by their own. If they have to be responsible to everything they do, they will become aware that they should be independent. They would also appreciate their parents. よろしくおねがいします。

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自由英作文の添削をお願いしますテーマ：A large earthquake event is expected in the Tokai area in the near future. Describe the preparations you would make in anticipation of such a disaster. If a disastrous earthquake were to occur while you were studing at this university, what would you do? 条件：３パラグラフ以上、１５０字以上、序論・本論・結論が明確であること　 It is often said that a large earthquake occurs in the Tokai area in the near future. As I experienced the large earthquake in the Tohoku area the other day, I am very nervous about such disasters and highly motivated to prepare them. Through my experience, you should always prepare some degree of water and prepared food for a disastrous earthquake. It is because even a convenience store is closed just after a large earthquake. Next, if a disastrous earthquake were to occur while I were studying at this university, it would expected that many people are in panic. I know being in panic lead a second disaster. Thus, I would let students around me keep calm down, get out of this university, and move to safety area like play ground. After doing this, I would offer the leader’s instruction. This would make damages of a disaster as less as possible. Although you are often told to prepare a large disaster, you may do not know how to prepare for it. Preparing water and prepared food is necessary, of course, but it is more important that you talk about what would you do when a disastrous earthquake were to occur with people around you in daily life in advance. I believe that many people always imagine this may lessen the serious damages.(222words) 本日は英語の試験時間である９０分の最初に英作文を書きはじめました（いつもは最後でした）時間は３５分近くかかってしまいましたが、自分としてはいつもの作文より筋がとおっているかな、と思っています。添削して頂く際、この問題の配点を１００点として、何点くらいの評価か、回答者様の主観でかまいませんので評価して頂けたらありがたいです。よろしくお願いいたします。

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現在浪人中なのですが添削を依頼できる方もおらずこちらに質問させていただきました。勝手なお願いですがよろしければお願いしますテーマ　　オリンピックについて自分の考えを約１００～１５０語で述べよ In my opinion, the Olympics are very important events. As you know,this is the age of globalization, so it is necessary for you to contact more actively with foreigners, but there is few opportunity to do so. Some people may say that thay have such chance since a lot of foreigners come to and live in Japan. However, I rarely see Japanese people talking with foreigners very friendly. This is the case. Then,through sports, many people can communicate with people from all over the world. In other words, the Olympics can give you such opportunity. Therefore I would say that the Olympics are very precious.

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英作文の添削をお願いします。我が家の古いピアノには懐かしい思い出がたくさん詰まっている。5 歳からピアノを始めた娘たちもすっかり大人になり、今や誰も弾ひかなくなった。しかし、なかなか処分する気にはなれない。そういうピアノを買い取って再生させる会社があるらしい。プロの手で修理すれば、また美しい音を奏でることができるという。 There are a lot of nostalgic memories with an old piano in my house. My daughters, who started playing piano from 5 years old, had already become adults and none of us play the piano now. However I can’t decide to dispose of it. I hear that there is a company which buys pianos like our piano and renews them. If such pianos are fixed by professionals, the fixed pianos seem to make good sounds again. よろしくお願いします。　

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問題文：次のような想定で手紙の一部を書け。「あなたが中学生のときから文通を続けてきたJamesが初めて日本を訪れることになった。滞在期間は1月から2月までではどうかと言ってきた。それに対して、(1)来日の時期は3月末からの1ヶ月間にした方がよいとすすめ、(2)なぜその方がよいかを具体的に説明し、返事を出す事にした。印刷してある書き出しの部分に続けて、上記の(1)と(2)の内容を入れて、40語程度で書け。」 Dear James, I was delighted to get your letter and learn that you will be able to visit Japan in the near future. I am looking forward to meeting you. I will be happy to show you some of the famous places in Japan. You said in your letter that you would like to come for one month from January to February._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Please let me know if that would be all right with you. I'll be looking forward to hearing from you. My regards to your parents. Sincerely, yours, 自分の解答： I recommend that, however, you come for one month from in the end of March. That is why it will be still cold for getting around, and in spring, you can see a lot of beautiful Sakura which is popular for visitors in Japan. (44words)