この英作文で文法ミスなど校訂してくれる人いますか？
現在独学で英語を学んでいます。そこで今回自分でアメリカと日本の文化の違いやどのようにして、文化の違いを克服するかをエッセーにしてみました。特にどこかに見せる訳ではないのですが、塾などに行くお金がないのでだれにも文法ミスなどチェックしてもらう人はいません。そこでよろしければ校訂していただけないでしょうか？？
The first thing that I learned from my experience in the United State is accepting different culture. There are a lot of different culture between in the United State and Japan. It is extremely important for me to overcome a cultural difference, but I need to take pride in Japanese culture too. For example, American is individualism, but Japanese is collectivism. American people do not hesitate eating out alone at restaurant; however, Japanese do because they do not want to eat under someone's lonely eyes. Surprisingly, some Japanese students eat a lunch inside of restroom stall because they want to make sure nobody finds out. They do not want to give a mistaken impression of not having any friends at school. However, American usually does not care about what other people think about you. Also, there are a lot of people who eat alone at dining room of Santa Rosa Junior College. Now I do not care about eating alone at all. The second different cultural experience is social system. It is very common in Japan that you supposed to pay respect and be polite to whoever is older than you. However, American is not strict to be polite. For instance, when I talk with my instructor, I always try to be formal. If I meet my instructor in outside of the class, I bow to the instructor first and talk him or her formally. However, in the United State, students call the instructors by their first name like a friend. One day, I was walking with my classmate on campus, and we met our instructor. I was going to bow to him, but the instructor waved his hand to us and my classmate also did it to the instructor. I was surprised at what my classmate did to him because it is a kind of rude to wave hand to our instructor in Japan. In my opinion, this American culture is a good because Japanese social system is sometimes extremely annoying. I always have to pay respect to whoever they are older than me. In japan, older people are absolute. You have to pay respect to older people even a year older than you. Therefore, you cannot against your supervisor. Even if your supervisor is less ability than you, you have to respect and talk formally to him or her. However, in the united state, you can be in a high position instead of older coworkers because people make a valuation according to your ability.
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返事遅れましたが、ありがとうございました。プロの方ですか？