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都会にある大学と田舎にある大学どちらに行きたいですか？という問題に対しての回答です
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Of these two alternatives, I would like to go university in a large city for the following reasons.
First, when I want to buy a book, I would go to a big book store to find the book. It is easier to find the book than small town. And if I should become sick, I would go to a big hospital. Large city has many kind of facility, it gratifies my need. On the other hand, small city has lack of facility, although you might see the breathtaking view and can forget hustle and bustle of the city, it could not content me as a student.
Second, since a large city lives many people than small city, I have an opportunity to meet close friend or might meet rival. Close friend would help me when I was in trouble, good rival always stimulate me. To beat him I will study hard. Rivals existences exert a beneficial impact on me and I am sure that it can lead to take good score.
Finally, even though I am student, I cannot study all through the year, need take a rest.
When I have spare time, I would go to a game center to get rid of my stress, and art museum to feast of my eyes. While I have to self-control to avoid getting addicted to them, it is very good to refresh.
For these reasons, I would like to go to university in a large city, it is a far better choice as a place to study.
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