英語の添削をお願いします
テーマは「日本でオリンピックを開催すべきか否か」です。
I think we should invite Olympics to somewhere in Japan.
I think it would benefit Japan in some respects.
First, holding Olympics is very profitable.
Indeed, it would cost us much money, but profit would be larger than it.
It is because many foreign people come to japan and spend much money.
Moreover if Olympics were been held in Japan,
Japanese people could directly see it more easily.
When it is held in other countries, most Japanese people can't go,
and even if they were able to go,it would cost them too much money.
For these reasons, I think inviting Olympics is good for us.
文法のほか、文章構成なども指導していただけると嬉しいです。
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お礼
ありがとうございますー。 とても助かりましたー。