英作文の添削をお願いします
オンライン英会話がテーマの自由英作文です(前半)
I wonder how other people study English conversation. There are many schools out there where learners can speak to native English speakers and it is definitely one of the best ways to go learning there. However, as is often the case, they cost us much money, and of course, we couldn't improve our English conversation only by going there. Therefore it might be difficult for ordinary people to go there continuously until they learn enough.
途中のカンマの多い長い文はこれでもいいのでしょうか?
よろしくおねがいします。