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質問

I was able to change my basic character a little.
I did not decide it for myself.
I did not have such courage.
At first, I feel not proceed.
My mother told me "Go to Study Abroad in Australia."
And I made ​​up my mind.
The Australian people were very friendly and helpful.
When I talk to my host sister and I were very nervous.
I was talking wrong English, But she was not laughed.
Since that time, I was able to have a little courage
I talked with many people at school.
I was not ashamed able to speak the host family and friends.
I'm not shy anymore than ever.
This short-term study in Australia gave me courage.
I got a little aggressive.

私は少しもとの性格を変えることができた。私は自分でそれを決めたわけではなかった。私にはそのような勇気はなかった。私は最初気が進まなかった。私の母は私に、「短期留学に行け」と言った。そして私は決心した。オーストラリアの人々はとてもフレンドリーで優しかった。ホストシスターに話しかけたとき私はとても緊張した。私の英語は間違っていたけど彼女は笑わなかった。その時から私は少し勇気を持つことができました。わたしは学校でもたくさんの人と話した。私は恥かしがらずにホストや友達と話すことができた。私は今までよりシャイではなくなった。この短期留学は私に勇気を与えてくれた。私は少し積極的になった。

英語合ってますか？
間違っているところがあったら教えてください！！

回答No.2

RJERSJ · ベストアンサー

自分で書きましたね。よかったです。その方が勉強になりますよ
以下、直してみました。でも、これは参考だけにした方がいいと思います
(日本人が犯しやすい間違いをたくさんしていました。日本語をそのまま訳すのではなく、日本語で結局何を言いたいのか考えて、それにあった英語を見つけたらいいと思います）

I was able to change my basic character a little.
I did not decide it for myself.
I did not have such courage.

→ I was able to change my basic personality a little ALTHOUGH I did not decide to do so, BECAUSE
I did not have the nerve for that.

*大文字の部分、追加しました。

At first, I feel not proceed.
My mother told me "Go to Study Abroad in Australia."
And I made up my mind.

→　At first, I felt reluctant.
My mother told me, "Why don’t you go to Australia to study English?"
And I made up my mind to come to this country.

*Proceed＝進む。気が進まない＝reluctant.
（日本語で何を意味するのか考えて、英語を選びましょう）
*お母さんの言葉は、元ではかなりキツい言い方なので「オーストラリアに英語を勉強したら？」にしました。「留学する」の直訳で「study abroad」としたと思いますが、この場合は単純に「study in Australia」です。

The Australian people were very friendly and helpful.
When I talk to my host sister and I were very nervous.
I was talking wrong English, But she was not laughed.
→ The Australian people were very friendly and helpful.
When I talked to my host sister, I was very nervous.
I made mistakes when I spoke English but she did not laugh at me.

* I WEREではなくて　was
* Was not laughedは「笑われなかった」と言いたくて受動態にしたのでしょう？でも、ここで言いたいのは「彼女は私を笑わなかった」

Since that time, I was able to have a little courage
I talked with many people at school.
I was not ashamed able to speak the host family and friends.
I'm not shy anymore than ever.
This short-term study in Australia gave me courage.
I got a little aggressive.
→ Since then I started having a little courage, and I talked with many people at school.
I did not feel shy and was able to talk with my host family and friends.
I'm not as shy as I used to be. This short-term study in Australia gave me courage and
I became a bit more active.
* ashamed of＝恥じる（家が貧乏であることを恥じる＝貧乏で恥ずかしい）の意味。自分が恥ずかしがりやの時は、shy
* I'm not as shy as I used to be.「以前の私ほど。。。でない」



私もオーストラリアに１年住んでました。親切な人達ですね。いい経験しましたね

お礼

ありがとうございます
私はこれから留学予定です！

回答No.1

noel_lapin

以下どこまで正しいか不明ですが参考にしてください。

>I feel not proceed
I didn't feel like changing

>Go to Study Abroad
Go and Study Abroad（イギリス英語）

>When I talk to my host sister and I were
When I talked to my host sister, I were

>she was not laughed
she didn't laugh

>I was not ashamed able to speak
Without being ashamed, I was able to speak