【かなり急いでおります】ビジネス英文メールのご添削

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下記のビジネス上の英文メールについて、おかしな箇所や丁寧にした方が良い部分がありましたら訂正をお願いいたしますm(_ _)m
長いですが、どうぞ宜しくお願い申し上げますm(__)m

Thank you for taking time to interview the candidate today.
She has informed us that she would like to join your member and work together.
For this reason, she frankly would like to work with you and can work at environment in English and make use of her experieece of planning event, communicate with a lot of people.

Also, regarding the candidate whom you have been interested in,
We have talked with her this morning and she informed us she is still interested in working at
your company.
And she is still not scheduled to interview another company.
She seems to is not to interview another company unless you chose her.
Thank you for your consideration.

本日は(弊社人材派遣バンクからご紹介した候補者の)面接ありがとうございました。
彼女は御社で働きたいと申しています。
理由は率直にあなたと働きたいと思ったこと、また英語の環境で働けること、過去のイベント運営経験を活かし、社内外多くの人とコミュニケーションを取りながら働けることに魅力を感じていると聞いています。

また先日面接して頂き要望の保留になっているもう一人の候補者について、
今朝意向を確認した所、まだ御社で働きたいとのことです。
また他社での面接は決まっていないようです。
おそらくあなたから採用の回答を頂かない限り次の選考に進まないと思います。
ご検討宜しくお願いします。

回答No.1

cbm51901

Thank you for taking time to interview our candidate today.
She says that she wishes to join your team and work as a staff member at your company for the following reasons:

1. She simply felt she would be at ease working with you.
2. Working in an English environment is appealing.
3. She will be able to apply her experience in the field of event planning.
4. She appreciates the challenges involved in communicating with many people both within and outside the company. .

As for the other candidate whom you had been interested in, we re-affirmed her intention this morning, and she informed us that she is still interested in working at your company.
She is not planning to take interviews with other companies.
I believe she is holding off other interviews until she hears the result of acceptance / refusal from you.

Thank you for your consideration.