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テーマは「大学の秋入学について」です
Recently,many universities are considering whether change the admission season from spring to autumn or not. This attempt arouse wide public concern, and, of course the public divided into supporｔer and opponent.
In my opinion, it is beneficial to universities. Under the existing system, because of the different program between Japanese university and foreign university, each students are hard to study in abroad.So, If the attempt carry out, many Japanese students are easier to go abroad and Universities can receive more international students. Moreover the increasing of international students in Japan can improve Japanese students' sense of competition and cooperation.
However, opponent says this attempt can destroy Japanese traditional culture. They think globalization is equal to imitating USA, and Japan should have own position in the world.
As far as I concerned,the opponent's opinion is too much exaggerated. Foreign country is not only USA , but also including non-English country. And we can't neglect Japanese culture. If the globalization will be success, Japan's economy turn to good condition gradualｙ.
From the above thing, I support the autumn admission.
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回答ありがとうございます。 女性に～定着しているって言葉が私にはすごいわかりづらいよう思えます。 はじめはSPS700さんと同じような解釈で英作をしたですが、なんか女性が聞くようにも文章が読み取れてしまって・・・（笑 私だけなのかもしれませんがすごい問題文が悪いと思いました。 愚痴ってしまってすいません。。。