テキスト本文に返事を手紙形式で書く、という課題をやりました。見て頂ける

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テキスト本文に返事を手紙形式で書く、という課題をやりました。見て頂けると幸いです、よろしくおねがいします。

テキスト本文の内容は↓です。
・アメリカの教育は、競争的でテスト志向
・幼稚園生の子供に家庭教師をつける人が増えている
・ＷＡＳＬと呼ばれるテストがあり、テキストは本屋に一杯ある
・テストには悪い点がある→理不尽な負担を子供にかける、テストで課される科目だけに集中してしまう、貧困学区、学習障害の子供たちを差別する。

＜私の返信＞
Dear (名前)，
Thank you for your letter. The story about the American education was very interesting. The Japanese education resembles American education, too. There is a test called unified university entrance exams（＝センター試験） in Japan. More than 500,000 take an examination for it.
I think that there is the reference book almost as same as WASL. Many people go to the cram school to raise the score of the test. However, universities performing a recommendation examination increase recently in Japan. From the influence of the declining birthrate, the management of the university turns worse. That's why there are the people who do not experience a test. In them, there is the person who cannot follow a class.
From the above, I think that I should impose test and both interviews on an examinee.
Of course you should watch the everyday results.
（「生徒が、テストで課されるそれらの科目だけに集中することを防ぐためにもね。そうすれば、テスト志向も変わってくるのかもしれないね。」という英文を入れたいのですが、うまく書けませんでした...）

What do you think? I look forward to your reply.
With best regards,
(名前)

また、何か加えられそうな文章がありましたらご教授頂けますと幸いです。

回答No.1

Chicago243 · ベストアンサー

>The Japanese education resembles American education, too.
The Japanese education resembles American education closely.
もし日本以外の国がアメリカににていて、日本もそうだというならばtooがつかえますけど、今回はにゅあんすが違うと思います。

>More than 500,000 take an examination for it.
More than 500,000 take such exams to enter universities each year.
an examinationでは具体性がなさすぎるような気がします。何のテスト?みたいな、、、

>I think that there is the reference book almost as same as WASL
I think that there are lots of reference books for entrance exams in Japan as well as in the US.

>Many people go to the cram school to raise the score of the test.
Many (high school) students go to cram schools to get higher score in an entrance exam.

>However, universities performing a recommendation examination increase recently in Japan. From the influence of the declining birthrate, the management of the university turns worse.

The management of university in Japan takes a turn for the worse, because of the declining birthrate. Therefore, most universities admit more students on recommendation every year to keep students constantly.
このへんは言いたいことはわかるのですが、ちょっと理論的構成にかけてましたのでいじってみました。

>That's why there are the people who do not experience a test. In them, there is the person who cannot follow a class.

As a result, the number of people who do not experience a entrance exam increase in universities in Japan. Actually, some of them can not follow classes.

>From the above, I think that I should impose test and both interviews on an examinees.

Thus, I think that I should impose both tests and interviews on an examinees.

後半はどの様な立場にたっての発言なんでしょうか、、少し
意図をくみ取りにくく訳しても本当に仰りたいことなのか自信がありません、、、、