アメリカのSATという試験を受けるのですが・・・
SAT用のレポートを試しに書いてみたのですが、文法や単語があまり得意でないので英語が得意な方にみてもらいたです。
できれば私のレポートを直していただいたり、アドバイスをくれるとありがたいです。
SATの点数は１から１２となってるのですが、私のレポートだと何点ぐらいとれるのでしょうか？
質問： Is it important to question people in positions of authority?
For the society to function properly and improve economically, it is essential for the people question against the decisions of the people in authority. If one does not question authority, people with no power will be immediately become oblivious slaves to tyrants and governors. It has been demonstrated in Tanzanian literature and Rwanda history that, not only the powerless people, but the humankind can benefit as a whole by questioning the authority.
In fact, a Tanzanian author Ariya Malokotela illustrates in her novel, Broken Night, of the effects in questioning authority can bring a fortune to the community. In the novel, Donato and Calida Kalagho are siblings in the village named Kibana, Tanzania. They were captured by the Europeans and were sold as slaves to the prosperous households, unable to have their own opinion and freedom. No matter what their masters ordered them to do, they had to restrain their own feelings and obey to their owner’s commands due to the laws. By the age of seventeen, Donato began to question the belief of slavery and determines to escape together with Calida at night. Later they become the leader for the organization that opposes the idea of slavery by helping numerous slaves free from their owner. They gather people who are against slavery and protest the Tanzanian government. Soon, Donato and Calida were able to ban all slavery throughout the country. Even the helpless children who were under slavery can change the entire country by standing up against the authority to have faith in their goal.
On the other hand, Rwandan philanthropist Nuru Muyila opposed the decision of authority to inform the government about the poor living conditions in Shyanda, Rwanda. Living in a small village, Nuru lost both of her parents by a disease that spread across the country, killing thousands of people. There were no hospital nor did doctors in her village and the government do nothing to support the people in a small village. Nuru had no choice but to work on the street by selling her parents’ belongings in order to survive. At a young age, she was determined to challenge the government for abandoning children who have lost their parents and had to live under poor conditions just like her. Eventually Nuru graduated from a decent university in Rwanda and became a teacher to educate the children who had no opportunity to attend a school. She started a program in which they help provide schools in the small villages and give opportunities to the children. Moved by her efforts and determination, the government gave funds to support the program with schools, blackboards, chairs, desk, pencils, and other school supplies that were necessary for the kids. In the Documentary magazine article by Louis Stevens, Nuru Muyila’s program was captured with pictures of her students in small classrooms with over 30 attentive students. Children in Rwanda are given with the opportunity to have equal educations throughout the country because of Nuru Muyila’s actions in questioning the government.
It is crucial to challenge the authority for the improvement in society’s economy. The novel by Agriya Malotela and the adventures of Nuru Muyila supports the idea of this theory. Advancing the society is not just simply by blindly following the people with power, but challenging each other for the benefit of everyone.
よろしくおねがいします。
