英語討論「公共の場での喫煙は禁止すべきか」の添削お願いしますl。
「公共の場での喫煙は禁止すべきか」というテーマで英語討論をすることになりました。私なりの考えを英文でまとめてみました。英語の討論をあまりしたことがないのですが、このような表現でよいのか自身がありません。よきアドバイスをおねがいします。
Smoking should be banned in public places; for or against?
I support a bun about smoking in public places such as eating and drinking places , department stores, hospitals, theaters, assembly halls , and so on…..
For reason, the first, the harmful effects of tobacco on health are well known. I read on the web that every year about 5 million people around the world die from tobacco-related illnesses. Moreover evidence about the risks of passive smoking is clear, I’ve hard that second-hand smoking in the workplace causes many deaths each year.
I have a child so I worried when I go with my son to stores or restaurant, if there is a person who is smoking around us.
The second reason is that a ban would encourage more smokers to quit. My husband smokes every day, but I want him to quit smoking for my son, me and himself.
I think ,however , It’s difficult for him to quit…
The third, the health-promotion law in Japan aims to prevent passive smoking in public places. Now, many eating places have smoking or non-smoking seats, but I think for preventing passive smoking, smoking places should be covered tightly.
More aggressive methods are required.
