Sentence Combining

質問

いくつかの短いセンテンスを１つのセンテンスでコンパクトにまとめる練習をしているのですが、分からないところがあるので、教えてください。
☆←短いセンテンス　　　★←私が1文にしたセンテンス　です
※←私が疑問に思っている点です

☆People used spices in place of money. It was convenient. That was because they were small. They were also not as heavy as metal coins.
★It was convenient for people to have used spices in place of money because they were not only small but also not as heavy as metal coins.
※they were not only small but also not as heavy as metal coinsのところで、and　でつなぐ文は前後が同じ形になっていないといけないということをきいたのですが、どうしたら同じ形にできますか？
★Tamura Eiko is my aunt. She is an interesting person. She was born in Taiwan. She went to school in New York. Now she lives in Russia.
☆My aunt,Eiko Tamura　is an interesting person, who was born in Taiwan and went to school in New York is now lives in Russsia.
※コンマ　のつけ方はあっていますか？

★The culture festival is an important event. It is the most important event in our school life. Many students spend more than six months for this event. For more than six months, they prepare for this event.
☆The culture festival for which many students spent more than six months to prepare is the most important event in our school life.
※これであっているでしょうか？
★A Tv station carried out a survey recently. The result was this. Japanese high school students study more than their American counterparts. Also, they do not sleep as long as their American counterparts.
☆According to the survey which was carried out by a TV station recently, Japanese students study more and less sleep than their American counterparts.
※recentlyの位置、less　Sleepという表現はあっていますか？
★My hometown is Maebashi. It is in Gumma. It is located about 100 km northwest of Tokyo. It is a beautiful city. It has a population of 300,000.
☆My hometown, Maebashi in Gumma is beautiful city which is located about 100 km northwest of Tokyo has a population of 3oo,ooo.
※この文章でいいでしょうか？

★Sendai has a lot of turist spots. The most famous one is Aoba Castle. The castle was built by Date Masamune.
☆Sendai has a lot of turist spots.
The most famous one is Aoba Castle which is built by Date Masamune.
※どうしても2文になってしまうのですが、どうしたら1文にすっきりまとめられるでしょうか？

とても長い質問ですみません…。

回答No.5

mabomk · ベストアンサー

★ My hometown is Maebashi. It is in Gumma. It is located about 100 km northwest of Tokyo. It is a beautiful city. It has a population of 300,000.
☆My hometown, Maebashi in Gumma is beautiful city which is located about 100 km northwest of Tokyo has a population of 3oo,ooo.
※この文章でいいでしょうか？
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A beautiful city, Maebashi, Gumma, is my hometown,
located about 100km northwest of Tokyo, its population
is about 300,000.
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★Sendai has a lot of turist spots. The most famous one is Aoba Castle. The castle was built by Date Masamune.
☆Sendai has a lot of turist spots.
The most famous one is Aoba Castle which is built by Date Masamune.

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In Sendai you find a lot of tourist spots. Among them, the old
castle Aoba-Jyo is very famous. It was built more than 400
years ago by then sovereign Date Masamune. The castle is
nominated as one of the beautiful 100 castles in Japan.
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これで終わったかな?　最後はおまけで「日本百名城」も、、、、、(笑)

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親切に回答してくださり、本当にありがとうございました。
とても参考になりました！！

回答No.4

mabomk

★ A Tv station carried out a survey recently. The result was this. Japanese high school students study more than their American counterparts. Also, they do not sleep as long as their American counterparts.
☆According to the survey which was carried out by a TV station recently, Japanese students study more and less sleep than their American counterparts.

これはこんな風に短くしました。
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According to the recent study by a TV station,
high school students in Japan study more than
and sleep less than their American counterparts.
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Japanese students study =　students vs study
は同類の語句が続いて、語呂が良くないので、切り離しました。

回答No.3

mabomk

★ The culture festival is an important event. It is the most important event in our school life. Many students spend more than six months for this event. For more than six months, they prepare for this event.
☆The culture festival for which many students spent more than six months to prepare is the most important event in our school life.

これはこんな風に短くしました。
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Many students here spend more than six months
for the cultural festival to make the this important
event most successful.
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回答No.2

mabomk

★ Tamura Eiko is my aunt. She is an interesting person. She was born in Taiwan. She went to school in New York. Now she lives in Russia.
☆My aunt, Eiko Tamura, is an interesting person, who was born in Taiwan and went to school in New York is now lives in Russia.

これはこんな風に短くしました。
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My aunt, Eiko Tamura, is an interesting person, born in
Taiwan and educated in New York, and now she is living
in Russia.
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回答No.1

mabomk

☆People used spices in place of money. It was convenient. That was because they were small. They were also not as heavy as metal coins.
★It was convenient for people to have used spices in place of money because they were not only small but also not as heavy as metal coins.

面白いですね、これはとても勉強になります、私にも。

最初の一文だけ、こんな風にしてみましたが、
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Spices was once used as money in place of metal
coins, because they were so small and light to
carry and exchange.
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「once」は是非残しておいて下さい、いつもいつも使われていた訳ではありませんので。

残りの分は、後刻、、、時間があれば、当てにしないで待ってて下さい。