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英作しました。あっているか不安なので　どなたかチェックをお願いします。
We have been friends since we were little.
I likeｄ looking at her drinking milk when she was a baby.
We played computer game together. We loved playing dress-up together. We made bread and chocolate cookies together.
But the best thing I remember was going to an amusement park with her family. We enjoyed lots of rides and shopping there.
It was sad that we don't have much time together since she is　junior high school student.
私たちは小さいときからずっと友達です。
ミルクを飲んでいるときの彼女の顔をみるのが好きでした。
彼女とはゲームをしたり、きせかえごっこをしたり　パンやクッキーを作りました。
一番の思い出は彼女の家族と一緒に遊園地に行ったことです。
たくさんの乗り物にのったり、そこで買い物を楽しみました。
今彼女は中学生なのであまり遊ぶ時間がないのが寂しいです。

回答No.2

ocanada · ベストアンサー

幼馴染が中学生ということはasdfさんも同年代の方なのかな？
だとしたら、すごい英語が上手ですね。

>I likeｄ looking at her drinking milk when she was a baby.
I liked to watch as she drink milk...

>computer game
video games

>made bread and....
baked bread and...

>But the best thing I remember was...
....I remember is...

>We enjoyed lots of rides and shopping there.
We enjoyed (going on) many rides and shopping there.
(lots ofは間違いで、a lot ofもこの場合はrideは数えられるのでX）

>It was sad that we don't have much time together since she is　junior high school student.
It saddens me that we don't spend much time together now that she's a junior high school student.

お礼

お時間さいていただいきありがとうございました。
大変たすかりました。

回答No.1

ezorisu

概ねよく書いておられると思います。
以下のように直してみればいかがでしょうか。

1.We have been friends since we were little.
→since (our or her) childhood
2.I likeｄ looking at her drinking milk when she was a baby.
→I liked to watch her drinking....
3.We played computer game together. We loved playing dress-up together. We made bread and chocolate cookies together.
→We played computer games ,changing clothes and made bread....
together.
着せ替えごっこをする：change clothes together
着せ替え人形遊びをする：play with dress-up dolls
4.But the best thing I remember was going to an amusement park with her family.
→The best memory with her was we went to....
5.We enjoyed lots of rides and shopping there.
→lots of ridings and....
6.It was sad that we don't have much time together since she is　junior high school student.
→Now she become the junior high school student ,we feel lonely
not having much time together.

Have a Good Time.

お礼

お時間とりましたありがとうございました。　
助かりました。