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質問

大学の入試問題の類です。
問題『It is much harder to receive than to give.という言葉について述べよ。』

ここはこう書いた方が良い、などご指摘をいただければ幸いです。

作文
I agree with the statement especially in classes in colleges. For example,a professor has a class about philosophy. He can easily gives knowledge and ideology to his students. But I don't think all of them can accept his thoughts correctly. That's because they need to concentrate on his class and have a little knowledge about his thoughts before they have the class in order to understand what he gives.

回答No.1

Nakay702 · ベストアンサー

以下のとおりお答えします。

＞I agree with the statement especially in classes in colleges.
（後半は、especially when talking about college classes「特に大学の授業について話すときには」とでもしましょうか。）
⇒I agree with the statement especially when talking about college classes.

＞For example,a professor has a class about philosophy.
（has a class about philosophy → gives a lecture on philosophy の方がいいでしょう。）
⇒For example, a professor gives a lecture on philosophy.

＞He can easily gives knowledge and ideology to his students.
（gives→give、うっかりミスですね。）
⇒He can easily give knowledge and ideology to his students.

＞But I don't think all of them can accept his thoughts correctly.
（カッコつきで、Of course, I'm no exception unfortunately! などと追加すれば「クスクス笑い」くらい取れるかも…。）
⇒But I don't think all of them can accept his thoughts correctly. (Of course, I'm no exception unfortunately!)

＞That's because they need to concentrate on his class and have a little knowledge about his thoughts before they have the class in order to understand what he gives.
（a little は「少しは～する」、ただのlittleが「ほとんど～しない」。before they have the class は削除しましょう。〔入れるなら、動詞や時制の再考が必要〕。）
⇒That's because they need to concentrate on his class and have little knowledge about his thoughts in order to understand what he gives.

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お礼

丁寧な添削ありがどうございます！
Of course～の所、いいですね！思わず笑ってしまいました笑