英語で誕生日メール

質問

明日誕生日を迎える友人にお誕生日メールを送りたいです。

彼は24歳、私より年上で、英語圏の方ではありませんが、普段のやり取りは全て英語でしています。
今同じ国にいるのですが住んでいる場所が離れています。こんな内容で大丈夫でしょうか？補足、アドバイスなどありましたらお願いします。

Happy birthday to you xxxx!
What's your plan for today? I hope you will have a great time.
I would wish you face to face if I could be there!
And wanted to give you a present.
Anyway happy birthday again!
May this year be your best year ever :)
Have fun!

回答No.2

Obuchininja

Happy birthday xxxx!
Do you have anything specail plan for today? I hope you have a great time.
I wish I was able to say "Happy birthday" to your face and give you a present.
Anyway, "Happy birthday!" again.
May this is your best year.
Have a fun!

回答No.1

marbleshit

Happy birthday to you xxxx!
What's your plan for today? I hope you will have a great time.
I wish we were face to face if I could be there!
And could give you my present.
Anyway happy birthday again!
May this year be your best year ever :)
Have fun!

文法的なところにだけ若干修正を加えました。
素晴らしい内容です。