The population of Japan is becoming increasingly old. What do you think should

質問

Now I'm working on this problem, " The population of Japan is becoming increasingly old. What do you think should be done to support the elderly population of Japan ( around 140 words )

I tought of a flow of my plot about this essay.

話の流れとしては ( this is a flow of my plot...)

日本では高齢化の問題が深刻化している

２つの理由から支援すべきだ

この問題を解決するには、"介護サービス"の充実を図ることが大切

介護を自ら進んでおこなおうとする人が不足している
介護をするひとの給料が十分ではない

医療費をさげるべきだ
医療費が高くなり、病院に行きたくても、行けない人が増えている。

平和で、安全な社会を作るためにも、介護サービスの充実はどうしても
必要

Frist paragraph
In Japan the problem of becoming older is getting seriouse these days and there are a lot of elderly people in Japan.I think we should try to solve this problem quickly for two reasons.

second para
One thing for it is that nursing service is not enough for elderly people.It is because there are very few who is willing to take care of them. For people who have to take care of them , their salary is not enough to be paied by government . Therefore , government should support them by inproving nersing service.

thrid para
for another reason, to support them more, government should support them by lowing medical costs. Medical costs are getting higher and higher today and a lot of people can't go easily to see the doctors in hospitals.
For unemployees , the problem of medical costs is a very big problem.

last para
I think goverment should low medical costs and they should support their
life to live safely and healthly.

To answers ,I would like all of you to answer this problem in English.
I hope you could help me . Thank you so much !!

回答No.1

ocypodidae · ベストアンサー

Frist paragraph
In Japan the problem of becoming older is getting seriouse these days and there are a lot of elderly people in Japan.I think we should try to solve this problem quickly for two reasons.

In Japan, the problem of an aging population is becoming serious. I think it is important that we attempt to tackle this issue promptly for the following two reasons.

second para
One thing for it is that nursing service is not enough for elderly people.It is because there are very few who is willing to take care of them. For people who have to take care of them , their salary is not enough to be paied by government . Therefore , government should support them by inproving nersing service.

Firstly, the current elderly nursing care system is unable to cope with the growth in population of the aged. There are very few people who are willing to enter into the elderly nursing profession. It is important for the government to support the current services and raise the carers salaries, in order to attract more people into the profession.

thrid para
for another reason, to support them more, government should support them by lowing medical costs. Medical costs are getting higher and higher today and a lot of people can't go easily to see the doctors in hospitals.
For unemployees , the problem of medical costs is a very big problem.

Secondly, the govenment must lower medical costs for the elderly in order to offer more support. Medical costs are on the rise and many people are uable to afford to visit the doctor when they are unwell. For people who are retired and no longer have a constant source of income, medical expensives have become unaffordable.

last para
I think goverment should low medical costs and they should support their
life to live safely and healthly.

I strongly believe the government must intervene. The quality of elderly care is gradually becoming downgraded, whilst at the same time the costs of medical care is rising. The governement must review their social policies in order to reconstruct an effecient medical care system for the elderly.

お礼

Thank you very much for answering my question.

I wrote like this in my essay of the frist para, " becoming older " , but it was my mistake. I should have wirtten " becoming old".

May I ask you questions ? In second para, you used the word " current elderly people..." but is it wrong if I say " present elderly people " I mean that present is " 現在の”. I'm sorry ,but nursing service (介護サービス) is not corret use of the word ? Is it worng ? In the part of " ..attept to tacle this issue ", is it possible to change the sentence to " try to deal with the problem " ?
Why did you say " elderly nursing care system is " ? Not "care systems" ? ( 複数形）

Is it possible to say " it is important that goverment (should ) support...( thatで書くのはできますか？for the governmnet to supportとto 原形ではなくて。。

it pains me to say to you that I didn't understand the construction of the sentence in the last para. What I didn't understand > , "whist at the same time the costs of medical care... ". I had looked up the meaning of "whist" in a dictionary before I asked you. Is it correct sentence from the grammartical point of view ?

I'm so sorry for asking you for a lot of troublesome questions.
I apologize to you what I have said !!
I hope you answer the questions again when you have time.
I'm sorry.