Do the benefits of genetically modified crops outweigh danger ?

質問

Do the benefits of genetically modified crops outweigh danger ?

You have to cover these points on this essay and write
Three or more paragraphs, including an introduction and conclusion
Length: Around 200 words

Points
1 economic impact .
2 global warming .
3 government regulations
4 human heath
5 resistance to disease and pests
6 world hunger.

I chose " economic impact , global warming , and world hunger " from these points.
Could you say where my essay was wrong ?
was my essay written logically ? I would like to answer my quetions in English . Thank you for reading my quesitons.

★This is the flow of what I thought .
I wrote this essay in the 5 paragraphs.

topic sentence
I agree...I would like to say why I agree..for following reasons.

sopporting sentence ( 2 ~ 4 para)
There are many people who are suffering from world hunger , so you need to introduct genetic modified systems.

sopporting sentece
品種改良。Now global warming is more serious , and people should make environments sitable for humans.
( 世界の環境に適したものを作っていかなければいけない）

supporting sentence
genetic modified system can be productive
（遺伝子組み換えは、より大量生産できるようにさせてくれる）

concultion sentence
In conculusion, I agree..

★This is what I had wrote before I asked all of you.

In my opinion , I agree with the opinion that the benefits of genetically modified crops outweigh dangers. I would like to talk about why I should think so for folloing reasons.

It may true that eating modified crops will probably be danger for humans. However, there are the truth that there are many countries which can't be given enoght food in the thrid world countries. Considering these countires , genetically modified food should be necessary for poor people all over the world to live.

In the world. modified seed is going farster and faster today. The reason for it is that people have to make more environments On earth , global warming is increasingly becoming serious problems.

You should not forget the economic impact on their society. To make more genetically modified crops, it will make more multiple things and financial damage will be decreased . It will help the governemt provide poor peole with enough food.

In conculsion, it is oviously that genetically modified crops will not be danger for humans. Rather saying so, I strongly believe that these things will benefit a lot of things to humans.

I don't know how to say "品種改良” in English or the parts of where I wrote in Japanese
（日本語で書いたところは、英語でどう書けばよいのか分かりませんでした）

回答No.1

SPS700

1.( 世界の環境に適したものを作っていかなければいけない）

We have to produce what is friendly to the world's environment.

2.（遺伝子組み換えは、より大量生産できるようにさせてくれる）

Genetic modification enables us to produce more efficiently.

で合っていますかね

お礼

お返事するのが遅れてしまって、ごめんなさい。SPS様いつも回答いただきありがとうございます。実は、自分で考えた意見なのでわたしも単語の使い分けとか、文法的に正しいのかわからないのです。
申し訳ありません。
produce とか　friendly という言い方がよいのかも分かりません。
私が考えたこととしては Envirnment in the word should be suited for the current situation.

Genetic modified systems make possible by large-scale production
とか、genetic modified systems can mass-produce at a lower cost
と考えていました。