英作文の採点をお願いします。
英作文の採点をお願いします。英検準一級を受けようと思っています。英検の問題集に載っていた問題です。これだと１４点満点中何点くらい取れるでしょうか？よろしくお願いします。
～問題～
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Dear Izumi,
I hope you're well.
I read an interesting article about technology yesterday. It said that many people here in the U.K. are now choosing to get college degrees by studying online. Do you think online courses are good way to study?
The article also said that in Japan, many parents buy cell phones for their young kids. in your opinion, is it necessary for children to have cell phones?
When I was on the train today, the man next to me was talking on his cell phone. Do you think people should be banned from using cell phones on public transportation?
I look forward to your reply.
Josh
～回答～
Dear Josh,
It was nice to hear from you! Let me answer your questions.
First, in my opinion, online studying isn't a better way. It's important to study with other many students and talk with them.
Regarding Second question,although It's fact that many parents do that, I think children don't have to have their own cell phones. They're not necessary for them.
Using cell phones on train must be banned. There also are many people who want to get sleep on public transportation. Cell phones' sounds are so noisy, and prevent their sleep.People who use cell phones must be careful.
Take care,
Izumi
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