英作文の添削

質問

英作文の添削をお願いします。詳しく添削してもらうとありがたいです。

テーマ；修学旅行で海外に行く学校が増えている。それについての賛否。

　I agree with the increasing trend that students go on aschool trips abroad.
You may say that it is too expensive for most parents to afford to have their children
go abroad.
However, in my opinion, it is more valuable than saving money. as globalazation becomes
more common, we must develop views toward various cultures and thoughts. school trips
abroad is a chance to interact people different from culture, creed and so on.

回答No.1

sporespore · ベストアンサー

日本語がないので想像してやってみます

I fully understand the increasing trend of students going on a school trip abroad. You may argue that it is too expensive for most parents to send their children for this trip.
However, in my opinion, it is more valuable to join the trip than saving some money. As the globalazation becomes more obvious, chilren must develop positive views on various cultures and thoughts. The school trip abroad provides children a chance to interact with different people and expouse themselves to different culture, creed and so on.

お礼

添削ありがとうございます。
色々な表現や自分のミスがわかってよかったです
　説明不足でしたが大学受験の自由英作文なので日本語は書きませんでした。