英語日記

質問

英語の日記を書いてみたのですが、良ければ見て頂いて、文の間違いや
不自然な箇所などを指摘して頂けませんでしょうか。

稚拙な文と英語で申し訳ありませんが、よろしくお願い致します。

In Japan, there is a custom called "HANAMI". In HANAMI, people enjoy
looking at cherry blossoms, eating and drinking.
However I don't like HANAMI very much because there are a lot of people
who lack common sense and don't follow the rules. Some people use fire
though they are not allowed to there, others throw away their garbage.
Such people are not intersted in beaty of cherry blossoms ,only want to
have a party.

回答No.2

yingtao7

いかにも日本人が書いたという英語ですね。でも正確に書けていると思います。
私も英語はあまり得意でありませんが。

In　Japan we　have outdoor parties called hanami. It is a Japanese spring traditional banket which is enjoyed with the view of ocherry blossoms
But unfortunately there are load of people who ignore manners and don't respect the
rule. There are even some people who use fire, which is forbitten, and also others who don't hesitate to throw away their garbage.
They have poor interset in admiring cherry　blossoms. They are just keen on making a fuss.

回答No.1

princelilac

良いと思います。特に Some people 以下は言いたいことが伝わってきます。
beauty は単独なら無冠詞ですが、of cherry が続きますので、the が付きます。
最後の部分を、but want to have only a party とすればどうでしょうか？元の文が間違いという訳ではありません。not ... but ～と対比させました。