【英語】添削お願いします 無人島

質問

テーマは無人島に着いたらどうするかです。
設定としては自分以外にも何人か漂流者がいるそうです。

If I were flushed out to an inhabitable island, I would firstly suggest the
other survivors that we search for foods which enable us to live at least
three days. If it were not for foods, we can do nothing. Also, if not, it
would be a matter of time to die. Only with foods, we could have margin
to think what to do next.
Second, I would suggest that we examine whether it is safe around us.
If it were proved to be dangerous, for example, there are violent animals,
we would try to protect us. By contrast, if it were proved to be safe around
us, we could wait for help with relieved.

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回答No.1

hidekona

If I were flushed out to an inhabitable island, I would firstly suggest the
other survivors that we search for foods which enable us to live at least
three days. If it were not for foods, we can't do anything. Also, if not, it
would be a matter of time to die. Only with foods, could we have margin
to think what to do next.
Second, I would suggest that we examine whether it is safe around us.
If it were proved to be dangerous, for example, if there were violent animals,
we would try to protect ourselves. By contrast, if it were proved to be safe, we could wait for help.

内容はいいと思います。