英文が正しいか教えてください。

質問

英文が正しいかどうか教えてください。

First, I talk about my friends.
We can meet new person in school.
And we can favor them.
I didn’t know anybody when I went to high school at first time.
I wanted to make friends.
So I was speaking her who next to me sat down.
Now we are friends.
But we don’t always talk.
Then I thought her who is very kind by external appearances.
Of course, she is kind.
But rather than she is very cheer up.
I can’t know she is very cheer up only external appearances.
I know that I talked to her a lot of things.
Then I judge a person by external appearances.
But, the fact, she is very cheer up.

この初めの文のfirstは、firstよりもfirstlyの方がいいのでしょうか？
違いがあれば、教えてください。

あと、訂正などあれば教えてほしいです。

回答No.2

Him-hymn · ベストアンサー

First, I'd like to talk about my friends.
We can meet new people in school.
We will soon find our favorite classmates.
On the first day at high school, I had no one there who I had known before.
I wanted to make friends there.
So I spoke to this gir who was sitting next to me.
Now we are friends but we don’t always talk.
Soon I came to think that her kindness was only skin-deep.
Of course, she is very kind.
But she is a cheerful person.
I'm not sure whether she is trying to look cheerful or she is cheerful in nature.
I talk to her a lot of things.
So I tend to judge people by their external appearances.
But the fact remains. She is no doubt a very cheerful person.

この初めの文のfirstは、firstよりもfirstlyの方がいいのでしょうか？
→first, second, thirdとする方がよいと思います。
数えていくように言えるからです。
firstly, secondlyというのは副詞で、第一番目に～だーーというのが文を支配していくような感じになり、もったいぶっているという感じで、耳障りという感じを私は持ちます。

以上、ご参考になればと思います。

お礼

回答ありがとうございます。
ｌｙはつけなくていいのですね。
説明がわかりやすかったです。
訂正もありがとうございます。
参考になりました

回答No.1

sknuuu

First, I [will] talk about my friends.
We (canいらない) meet (new person → someone we don't knowかな?) in school.
And we can favor them. (← ここわからない We become friendsってこと?)
I didn’t know anybody when I went to high school [for the first time].
I wanted to make friends.
So I [spoke to a girl] who [sat down next to me].
Now we are friends.
But we don’t always talk.
Then I thought [she might be] very kind by [her] appearance.
Of course, she is kind.
But rather she may be very [cheerful].
I [don't] know [if] she is [cheerful] only [by] appearances.
I talked to her a lot of things.
Then I judge a person by external appearances. (←ここで言いたいことがわからない)
[In fact], she is very cheerful.

>この初めの文のfirstは、firstよりもfirstlyの方がいいのでしょうか？

firstでOKです

お礼

訂正ありがとうございます。
参考にさせていただきます。
ありがとうございました！