自由英作添削お願いします!!10.早稲田政経

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添削お願いします!!　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　早稲田政経では文法ミスなどがなければ細かい論理構成までは減点をしません！20点満点でお願いします!! 　 問題.
Read the statement below and write a paragraph giving at least two reasons why you agree or disagree with it."The Olympic Games should be abolished"

解答.
I totally disagree with the idea that Olympic Games should be abolished for two reasons.First,it is almost impossible to put this idea into practice. Many people in the world would no longer be able to enjoy how well athletes played the sports.Some athletes would lose thier jobs.Trying to implement this idea will cause too many problems.Second,the Olympic Games bring about positive effects on the ecconomy of the host nation. Many foreign people visit the host nation and spend a lot of money eating ,shopping ,and staying hotels.(93word)

回答No.2

cbm51901

＃１です。失礼しました。一箇所訂正です。

Many people in the world would no longer be able to enjoy how well athletes PERFORM IN THEIR OWN FIELD.
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Many people in the world would no longer be able to ENJOY WATCHING how well athletes perform in their own field.

観戦者（視聴者）は競技者のパフォーマンスを”観戦”することに”愉しみ”を見出すので、"enjoy watching" になります。

時制に問題はないと思います。

ご参考まで。

回答No.1

cbm51901

I totally disagree with the idea that Olympic Games should be abolished for two reasons. First,it is almost impossible to put this idea into practice. Many people in the world would no longer be able to enjoy how well athletes PERFORM IN THEIR OWN FIELD [played the sports].Some athletes would lose THEIR [thier] jobs.Trying to implement this idea will cause too many problems. Second, the Olympic Games bring about positive effects on the ECONOMY [ecconomy] of the host nation. Many foreign people visit the host nation and spend a lot of money： eating, shopping, and staying IN hotels. (93 wordS)

・Perform を使うと良いでしょう。
・スペルミスが三つありました。気をつけましょう。（特に最後の wordS は勿体ないです。）
・例を列挙する際のコロン [：] の使い方をマスターしましょう。

２０点満点で１７点かな。

お礼

ありがとうございます!!スペルミス気をつけます。performは仮定法過去の時制の一致で過去形にしなくてもいいんですか？