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Summer Vacation Speech - Tips Needed
- Looking for advice on my upcoming summer vacation speech. Need help with grammar and length.
- I recently attended a photography exhibition during my summer vacation and it was a memorable experience. The exhibition took place in Sakae and featured a wide collection of photographs taken by both amateurs and professional photographers. I was particularly impressed by the beauty captured in these photos. Now, I'm preparing a speech about this experience and would appreciate any advice on grammar corrections and how to expand the length of my speech.
- Seeking guidance for my 2-3 minute summer vacation speech. I visited a photography exhibition during my break and it left a lasting impression. The event took place in Sakae and showcased a diverse range of photographs, including works by amateurs and professionals. The captivating imagery has inspired me to share my experience through a speech. If you could provide feedback on grammar and suggestions to make it more substantial, it would be greatly appreciated.
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まず、文法の間違いを正すと、以下のようになります。 修正、追加、削除の箇所は "" で表示しました。 I went to "a" photograph exhibition in this summer vacation. That was "a" memorable day I had in this summer vacation. The photograph exhibition was "taken" place at the Sakae. There "were" many "photographs" and many people in this exhibition. This photo exhibition was planned by Fujifilm. More than 100 photos were "" there. Most "photographs are" taken by "amateurs" and "the others were" taken by "a photographer (photographers)". I was impressed by "the" beautiful photos. ２～３分のスピーチということですので、もっと表現を加えましょう。 No1の人も指摘していますが、上の文には、あなた自身の考えや気持ち についての記述が足りないように感じます。これを盛り込むともっと 良い文になるでしょう。 例えば、、、 私は写真に関心があって、この写真展をとても楽しみにしていた。 一番印象に残った写真は？？？です。 自分も人を感動させるような写真を撮ってみたい。 などです。
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えーと、内容についてだけ。 写真展に行った。多くの人がいて写真もたくさんあった。感動した。 では、なにに感動したのかさっぱりわかりません。全体的にどんな写真の写真展だったのか（人物なのか風景なのか花なのか昆虫写真なのか）、その中でどの写真のどんなところが気に入ったのか感動したのか、なども盛り込まないとかなりうすっぺらい印象です。
